Review of AI essay and newsletter goals

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@2 - How I work with AI.md I just finished the first version of this essay, please review and criticize it based on the information you can find in this folder

And also, you should understand that the goal of this newsletter are

• Help people stay in the long game
• Help people develop a long term mindset, do the right thing, be impatience in action and patience in result

This essay serve as a milestone of my thinking, since I constantly work with AI

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I’ll review your essay comprehensively. Let me first explore the directory to understand all the context available.

Now let me provide a comprehensive critique of your essay. I’ll organize this by major issues and then by section.

Major Structural Issues

1. The Opening Lacks the Emotional Punch It Promises

Your opening line is powerful: “For the very first time, it feels like I am not the protagonist of my own task.” But then you immediately dilute it by explaining what happens. This wound should breathe more.

The problem: You jump too quickly from the emotional truth (not being the protagonist) to the explanation (ChatGPT launch, time zones). The reader doesn’t get to sit with that uncomfortable feeling.

Suggested structure:

• Start with the protagonist line
• Let it land (maybe 1-2 more sentences exploring what this FEELS like)
• THEN pivot to the time zones story as a lens to understand this disruption

2. The Time Zones Story Feels Disconnected

The 1883 time zones story is interesting, but the connection to AI feels forced. You say “I do think this also apply to the usage of AI” but you don’t show HOW.